Haiku # 230 August 17, 2012July 24, 2012The right mood times were darker – once we leaned against each other nestling in the shade Giudecca Island, Italy # 230 Share this:TwitterFacebookLike Loading... Related
snowbirdpress August 17, 2012 / 8:59 pm For my own pleasure, I’m going to move the em-dash to the other side of once having this haiku read: times were darker once — we leaned against each other in the shade I rather like happy endnings… and by writing it this way I can imagine them gaining comfort from each otherr in spite of the dark times…. I love haiku… take from it what feeds you! Thanks for this post… it’s a great haiku … can be read many ways…
The right mood August 17, 2012 / 10:13 pm Hi Merrill, you can move the em-dash wherever you like, it’s a pleasure for me. 🙂 I like your version too!
melodylowes August 17, 2012 / 11:20 pm You have been nominated! Do whatever you like with this… http://melodylowes.com/2012/08/17/its-raining-its-pouring-aka-the-awards-are-out-in-force/
The right mood 
For my own pleasure, I’m going to move the em-dash to the other side of once having this haiku read:
times were darker once —
we leaned against each other
in the shade
I rather like happy endnings… and by writing it this way I can imagine them gaining comfort from each otherr in spite of the dark times….
I love haiku… take from it what feeds you! Thanks for this post… it’s a great haiku … can be read many ways…
Hi Merrill, you can move the em-dash wherever you like, it’s a pleasure for me. 🙂 I like your version too!
You have been nominated! Do whatever you like with this… http://melodylowes.com/2012/08/17/its-raining-its-pouring-aka-the-awards-are-out-in-force/
Thank you Melody! 🙂