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times were darker – once
we leaned against each other
nestling in the shade
Giudecca Island, Italy
# 230
Haiku # 230
17 Friday Aug 2012
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For my own pleasure, I’m going to move the em-dash to the other side of once having this haiku read:
times were darker once –
we leaned against each other
in the shade
I rather like happy endnings… and by writing it this way I can imagine them gaining comfort from each otherr in spite of the dark times….
I love haiku… take from it what feeds you! Thanks for this post… it’s a great haiku … can be read many ways…
Hi Merrill, you can move the em-dash wherever you like, it’s a pleasure for me.
I like your version too!
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You have been nominated! Do whatever you like with this… http://melodylowes.com/2012/08/17/its-raining-its-pouring-aka-the-awards-are-out-in-force/
Thank you Melody!